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Re: Child's Play Part One
I'm not sure what can I say to help this out. I like it like this already. Maybe I'll just say something I 'wouldn't' want to happen in your next ...
Oct 19, 2009 -
Re: Shadow Flight: un-retirement chapter one: Briefing
I don't like doing grammar check, so I'll skip that. First of all, the setting. This is some sort of fantasy that you want the reader to know all the ...
Oct 19, 2009 -
Re: Adolescence- The crappiest time of your life.
Ahha! Who would've thought I'd bump into a fellow Indo by clicking a random title? Well, reading this gave me the feeling when I read the teen Indo novels, but ...
Jun 22, 2009 -
Re: My Sole Reason For Suicide [Chapter One. Kitten]
I kind of like it, but I hope this one will have something more than suicidal intentions. I walk along the New York streets alone. I check the windows, seeing ...
Jun 19, 2009 -
Re: S.P. 4.1
Hello, I didn't come too late, right? Where did he go, and why leave me here? Change 'leave' to 'leaving' but that's the only way to move without causing pain ...
Jun 8, 2009 -
Re: Let Me Love You(5)
Hello, sorry for the very late review @_@ The others already picked out most of the critiques, so mine won't be as long. Gary slowly ambled down the curved, blue ...
Jun 8, 2009 -
Re: The Strangest Summer of My Life {Prologue}
Hello. I decided to make a quick review as this is the yet another story that caught my attention. Not too long, not too short, a beginning, and not many ...
Jun 6, 2009 -
Re: Hurting -- Chapter One
Hello. Well, I can't really try to fix the grammars since 3 people beat me to it. Maybe just a few that they may left out. So, here we go! ...
Jun 2, 2009
